The poem has so much more depth since the reading. I can feel the emotion in each line whether it be longing or resentment. Personally there is something about Pull, Tug that I prefer overall. It speaks volumes and the emotion is laid on thick. Great job Dhi! Looking forward to more from you.
thank you! i’m glad the feedback from Draftspace encouraged me to keep working on this poem, and i’m happy to hear you enjoyed it! (i gravitate more towards the second part myself, but wanted the contrast of voices — also it’s always fun to play with structure).
Dhi I especially enjoyed the last 5 verses of Pull,Nudge.
…stay with the twinkling my friend stay do not turn into the dust of sleepfullness. leave. …there is only stillness, and we need to keep moving.
There is a rhythm, and a silence I heard in the last line. And the images did grab my attention and made me move with your rhythm: the paper thin dreams, the room a safer tomb, and the sea of things that curl and lift away.
Thanks Dhi for sharing.
thanks, Raina! glad you like it.
(Pull, Nudge is also my fave — but i felt like it didn’t have the same ring without its contrasting counterpart).
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